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Review:FredWeasleyIsMyKing says:
Hello again :)

Gosh - such an amazing chapter once again! You have such a gift for writing Remus and his werewolf side. I know I told you in the last review but the way you keep them so separate but then allow them to talk to each other at the important moments it's just fascinating to read. I'm so hooked on this story!

You have an amazing grasp on how the pack works and how both the wolf feels and reacts to the situation around him. From protecting his territory to protecting Sirius when he felt he owed him a debt. It makes it so interesting to read and you write stuff I'd never really considered before but then when I read it I'm like, well of course that must have happened!

I think my favourite bit of the chapter was when Sirius stopped the wolf biting Gavin but then when wolf was being attacked he protected him! The loyalty and friendship was just so clear even in animal form and it was just amazing!

Then you changed view again and we're right back with typical Remus, panicking that the doors open and he can taste blood. You have both Remus and the wolfs characters down perfectly.

Remus' reaction to seeing the boys downstairs was great, from being angry and unbelieveing, to then being confused by their acceptance to just being down right happy. It was lovely to read, and as I've already said, a typical Remus reaction!

I love love love that you gave the nicknames an orgin, and through doing that you showed how much the boys struggled to do what they did for Remus! It wasn't easy and Sirius getting stuck was a nice touch. Hooves made me laugh so much though! I almost wish that was what James had gone for in the end!

The way James worked out that he was a werewolf as Peter said Remus was like a girl was hilarious and from now on, this is the exact way I will think of this. It was just so great and funny!

The boys though are so cute and lovely! When they were telling Remus about all the research they did and that they were hoping to be friends with wolf Remus as Animagi. I just wanted to give them a big hug! It was lovely!

Two things I liked that you mentioned, McGonagall getting proposals from that man and the bit where Sirius tells Remus he likes his rabbits cooked. Just passing comments but they really made me smile.

Three tiny little typos:

'The name McGonagall stirred a thought on Wolf's mind but quickly dismissed it' I think it just needs to be 'he quickly dismissed it' or 'was quickly dismissed'. Your just missing a word basically.

'The dog did the same as Wolf as he carried the rat, which seemed to be clinging on the dog's fur for his dear life' the 'dear' has a bold 'r'?

'James gave me a cheeky smile and a wink just as I looked at my down on my bare shoulders' the end bit doesn't make sense. You either need 'I looked down on my bare shoulders' or 'I looked at my bare shoulders'

Just minor tiny tiny things but I haven't really got anything in the way of CC as I love the story just as it is so wanted to be helpful in some way :)

Another amazing chapter though, looking forward to reading more soon!

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Waaah! I can't believe that I've taken forever and ever to come and respond to this! :(

Wolf is such a fun character to write. To be honest, he slowly became an OC of his own without even trying.

Whenever I was reading the book of Kitty Norville, they had pack moments and behavior and I started to wonder about Remus. And how it must have been with him and the rest of the Marauders. I sort of had a moment like you of "of course this must've happened!"

Remus's reactions were fun to write. In fact because of that f-bomb I had to bring of the fic rating but it wouldn't have been 'normal' if he didn't say it! I mean, he just found his three friends in the raggedy shack. The three people that he's been hiding the secret from are there, like it's nothing. Of course he was going to drop the f-bomb and be mad!

I'm super glad that I made you laugh with those moments because I think I'm horrid with comedy! I at least got someone to chuckle at my silly jokes! XD

Thank you for pointing out the CC. I went ahead and edited those parts so they should be fixed now. :D

Thank you so much for reviewing and once again so so so so sory for the delay! I feel bad! But man, real life has been kicking me in the behind lately! :(

Anyway! On with responding to your other and everyone's reviews! XD

Until next time

--Rosie


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