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Review:Gabriella Hunter says:
Hello!

Hey, there! Its Gabbie here with your requested revie and I'm pretty sure that I'd favorited this but it works out lovely for me regardless!
So, what a wild night for Edie, huh? I liked how you chose to open this chapter though, I was really curious about her relationship with Lisa (And working in that pub has to be torture). It seems that there's a bit of jealousy regarding her and after you described Lisa, versus Edie, I sort of felt bad for her. She tries hard and then just gets smacked around with reality but I hope that that doesn't damage their relationship, she made some cutting remarks that I picked up on. D': Perhaps its all the stress at WW that's making her sort of catty, though Lisa took it well, but then again, she was sort of tired wasn't she? I'm hoping that Edie's situation with WW goes better but by the end of this chapter, I was both rooting and worrying about her.
But I'll talk about that later!
I'm not sure which was funnier, the descriptions of the snobby group coming into the pub or the later moments with the accent-changing Viktor Krum! I was feeling so much sympathy for Edie in this chapter, I could practically see her foaming at the mouth as the orders kept coming and coming and coming. Hahhaha. Poor her. And then, she had to clean up the loo?! Uhm, way to make her night keep spiraling down but I think you might have done that on purpose to give a bit of hope at the end of this chapter. Maybe? I hope. D':
It'd make Edie feel better about that really nasty kiss from "Viktor Krum", I've got my doubts about this for some reason. Suspicious about that!
So, Rose! Sneaky little thing isn't she? I think Edie sort of underestimated how sly she could be, she mentioned the article so calmly while leaving out important information to draw her in. Well done on her part but Edie was about to explode if she didn't get answers, but I think she should be more careful. I dunno, but I think Rose is up to something a bit more fishy than what she told Edie and I can't wait to see how everything plays out!
So, Oliver Wood is going to be making an appearance, soon? Finally! I've been trying to see how she would react to him in my head and I can't quite picture her being formal and polite. And for some reason, I don't think Oliver Wood is going to be polite and easy either. Which is just more fun for me. :3
So, I don't really have any CC's for this! It was a tad long but since I make really long chapters for my stories, I plowed ahead without any problems. Still loving your characters and your realistic plot so keep up the good work! :D Thanks for the request too, honey, I love a good story.
Much love,
Gabby

P.S.: I will always love you shall be listened to by me later. Hahahaha. In homage to you and Ms. Whitney Houston! Hahaha.

Author's Response: Hello!!!

I think Edie has kind of resigned herself to accepting the fact that it's a shoddy job, and allows herself to be amused by it. Some of my friends who are bartenders just kind of go with the flow because you make good money, even if you're basically babysitting drunk people all night xD

Her jealousy of Lisa is tricky, because I don't want to portray Lisa as a bad person. Nor do I want Edie to be seen as one for not being fully supportive of her best mate. She does come across as catty at times, especially in the next chapter--I think she's just so frustrated by the hand that life dealt her that she's becoming a bit snarky. Bad Edie!

I've thought about shortening my chapters, and spreading out the content, but I'm just not sure yet... I want to have about 3,000 words per chapter and I think this one was almost to 5,000. Something I'll be considering, definitely!

YES LISTEN TO WHITNEY HOUSTON. hahaha. I wasn't sure exactly what tune I should have Krum belting out but that one seemed the most entertaining in my head.

Again, thank you so much for your reviews! I really appreciate you taking the time to leave such thoughtful feedback :D


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