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Review:CambAngst says:
Oh, Pansy, my Pansy! How I've missed thee...

I had a bad feeling that her mother wasn't long for this world at the end of the last chapter. It's sad, but not quite the same as if the two of them had a very warm, loving relationship. I guess it's sad in a different sort of way. Pansy almost seems to toy with the notion that she would have gotten closer to her mother if only they'd had more time. I tend to think that's a bit of self-delusion, but self-delusion seems to be something that Pansy is tragically gifted at.

Throughout this chapter, Pansy seemed to be getting these flashes of... something. I'm not completely sure how to interpret them, but I wonder whether they aren't her grief trying to break through the wall that her upbringing has erected around her emotions. Whether it's a bit of a memory of a sudden pang of sadness, something seems to be trying to get out. It's hard to guess whether it will be a good thing or a bad thing for Pansy if her walls are breached. Perhaps some of both. Thinking about her makes me sad.

The polite but empty condolences of her coworkers made it pretty clear that she hasn't yet been forgiven for her mistake, but at least she's getting that level of courtesy. I suppose a recovery is possible.

Your depictions of the funeral were sparse, chilly and really appropriate to the mood, I think. Pansy's thoughts seemed like they were geared toward trying to channel the turmoil she's feeling in any direction except toward her own grief. I especially enjoyed it when she was thinking about the flowers that adorned her mother's coffin, and the obvious symbolism that went along with it.

I thought you had some really great ideas about the customs involved in traditional, pure blood wizarding funerals. It all came across as appropriately solemn and respectful, but not overdone. The ceremony seemed simple and dignified. The whole idea of asking another to act as a surrogate for family when levitating the deceased to their final resting place and the significance of the choice almost had an Italian mafia sort of feel to it, I thought. I really loved the idea of using the selection as a means of reinforcing bonds between families or as a peace offering.

I'm really excited to see what happens next. Pansy seems to be on the cusp of something, some sort of emotional break-out or perhaps a collapse. Either way, Draco is a very interesting choice of companion. Nicely done!

Author's Response: Hello!

I was actually debating with myself about whether or not to drag out her mother's life just a little bit more... But then the scene at the end of the previous chapter wrote itself and seemed very odd and pointless to manipulate the scenes so that it didn't seem as though her mother was dead yet. (Does that last sentence make sense?).

Pansy is definitely capable of seeing the world through a lens. It's a tendency that she probably won't be giving up any time soon.

Pansy, as you know very well, isn't very experienced in dealing with her emotions. She hasn't had any practice in expressing her emotions and she doesn't quite understand just what exactly she's feeling at the funeral.

I'm glad that you liked the direction in which I took the funeral. I was trying to make the descriptions full enough so that readers could visualize what was happening but at the same time keep them sparse and blank enough to suit Pansy's mood. It was a difficult balance but I'm glad that it worked.

I'm happy that you're intrigued about what happens next. Draco will make another apparence in the second part and he will be a catalyst to a very important declaration on Pansy's part... :D


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