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Review:800 words of heaven says:
REVIEW TAG, YO! What up?

Pleasantries aside, I think this is the third story of yours I'm reviewing (and it's been fun!), and I just wanted to say, that as a writer, I think you have so much potential and I really enjoy reading your stuff!

Anyways, onward to this particular story. Ooh! Mystery! Suspense! Possible adventure! Definite danger! What's there not to love? So excited! This chapter was a pretty decent size, as far as chapters go, and I think that you've managed to set up the scene really well. I think an adventure story in first person is way cool - more personal and real that way, I reckon. This also sounds like an original idea, so that's also something to be excited about!

Onto characters - I hope your minor characters are allowed to become a little more defined later on! I think Charlie's parents sound like a lot of fun, and I would love to meet her dad. For some strange reason, I really love the dynamics in marriages, so I really want to see how you write them together - but a meeting with Dad first! Also - please make her cat into a character! I adore it when authors do that with pets!

Charlie seems pretty interesting. She's obviously got her flaws, and I think there's gonna be lots of room for lots of shenanigans because she sounds like a complete muggle when she talks about the Wizarding world! And I think her sarcasm is adorable! As she points out, she's clearly not a people person, and I think that shows through her sarcasm (which I think she uses as a defence mechanism as well) and the fact that she can't seem to read people or situations very well. This could also lead to some fun situations, I think!

And what was with the cliffhanger at the end, dude? Not. Cool. But I can't wait to see what Charlie does next, so I guess it must have worked!

Author's Response: Hello again! Haha, I really love your reviews! They're always so thoughtful and just amazingly awesome and put a huge smile on my face!

This is definitely a darker story than all my others, and more of a challenge to write, so I'm so glad you like Charlie's characterization so far! And I know! The cliffhanger-but I had to, I just had to!


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