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Review:EnigmaticEyes16 says:
I really like the idea of this story. I like how you include how women like to try and fix things, especially people. This person says they are what they are, and we can immediately take that as a challenge to make them better. But as shown here, it doesn't work. Instead Minerva ended up being manipulated, and not always for the best.

I enjoyed that Minerva saw Tom for what he really was and stood her ground with him. I do wonder whether he really meant what he said, about needing her. But maybe she was right to push him away. You say she gave him the final push that turned him into the monster he became, but it seems like he would have become it anyway whether she loved him or not, because he doesn't understand what love is.

I did notice some little things though. In the beginning, where I think you mean to say "pity and despair," you actually say "pit." And in the paragraph where you describe what Tom Riddle's become in italics, I think you should separate each statement with some sort of punctuation so it's easier to understand and follow. A little later on, you also say "as she spoked she dreamed of him." Spoke is the past tense of speak and doesn't need the d at the end. While this is a really good story, I think you might benefit by getting someone to beta it for you.

But other than those minor things, this was a really lovely story, and very thought-provoking. I think you did a wonderful job developing the plot and I even enjoyed the ending. I especially love the bit about how, while he was clearly the worst thing for her (driving her mad and all), that he made her better; stronger as a person and a witch. This was really good.

xxEnigmaticEyes16

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