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Review:Roots in Water says:
Hello again! It's been a while since I read your last chapter but I finally have time to sit down and review!

Wow- you're certainly keeping the pace quick and the endings interesting! I'm very intrigued to see what will happen with Greyback- perhaps werewolves will be more effective against zombies than fire is. By the way, I found it interesting that fire was not a more effective tool, though I guess you could say that it did stop them. The image of the shaking bones was very creepy and I could just imagine them coming together and forming a marching, skeletal zombie!

I wish we could've seen more of the emotional reactions to Harry becoming a zombie and Ginny becoming his Queen, especially since both happened so suddenly and so close together. I definitely do understand, however, that there isn't much time for emotional therapy when there's a zombie crisis threatening to destroy everyone's lives. ;)

I think that you did a great job with the action scenes in this chapter. They definitely displayed a great level of urgency and I was torn between siding with Lily's cries to not abandon Albus in the crowd of zombies or agreeing with Hermione's logical decision to get away from the hoard of brain-hungry zombies.

Albus and Lily's (and, I suppose, James') decision to participate in the fight against the zombies was definitely expected. I would have been surprised if they had chosen to stay far away from the fight, since it's something that Ginny and Harry wouldn't have done.

One more question before I finish this review: Why is Harry trying to collect his friends and family? Is he wanting to recreate his life in zombie form?

All in all, I think that you did a great job with this chapter and I'm very intrigued to see where you'll take the story next. Great work!

Author's Response: Oh my goodness thank you so much for coming to leave a review on my story!

I have seen quite a few complaints about the level of emotion depicted in the chapters and I have to say that you definitely see some of that emotion in later chapters. I honestly don't think that she had enough time to really process what was going on because her kids were involved and she was trying to get them to safety. So to me I think that that's what i was trying to get across, and then in later chapters I definitely explored more of her emotional reaction.

Thank you for your words about the action, that's one thing I'm always so nervous about when writing because I don't think I'm quite as adept at writing them but it's nice to get some positive feedback for it!


Harry collecting his friends and family is discussed a bit in later chapters in conjunction with the magic that was used to reanimate him :)

Thank you so much again!


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