|Review:||The Misfit says:|
Hi! I'm really sorry for the time it's taken me to come and review - RL got in the way. :(
So, I saw this one-shot didn't have many reviews so I thought I'd choose this one to review - and I certainly chose well! I don't read many Founders fics, but from what I know, your characterization of the Founders are perfect. The way that Helga is better than them all, but Salazar doesn't realize that until the end is wonderful - and fully backed up by canon, with the general mild disdain the other houses have of Hufflepuffs. I especially loved how you had Salazar concealing his internal uncertainty about his pure-bloodedness, trying to convince himself that he's just as pure as Rowena and Godric, and insisting on only pure-blood students - much like Tom Riddle!
I also like how Helga is unbothered by Salazar's opinion - it's very true to what's mentioned about her in canon, where the Hat says she'd take any student and teach them all, while the others all have specific ideas of what qualities they want in a student.
The way that you had Salazar cheat at the game was believable and in character for him, and I'm not surprised that Helga found it admirable that he would go to whatever means to get what he wanted, despite her initial annoyance.
I did notice a possible typo: “Have you ever been a child a day in your life, Salazar?” < I think this should be "a child for a day", however I said possible typo as I'm not too familiar with medieval language. :)
I would suggest including the physical descriptions of the Founders, and what Helga thought of Salazar. I understand that this was written as a companion piece to your novella, but you've written it excellently and I think with a little tweaking and the adding of more information, you could make it both a companion piece and a stand-alone one-shot, which might help to get more readers. XD
I really love this one-shot, especially the ending where Helga haunts Salazar's dreams with her eyes that are reminiscent of sunlit oceans - it's certainly a very good piece of writing! :) Again, I apologize for the delay in my review!
Author's Response: Hi Katie! Yeah, I totally understand the RL thing. It can get pretty crazy, but I'm really glad we got a chance to swap!
I really love it when people say they like my Founders fics because I know it's not everyone's thing, and it's not really a standout genre on HPFF. So I'm extra honored that you enjoyed this! You're actually not the first person to compare Salazar to Tom Riddle, and the more I hear it the more it makes sense to me. I see Salazar as very troubled and prideful, much like Tom was. And Helga is far and away my favorite character that I've ever written; she's just so different than the others, and she's determined to do things her way. And also, she just makes me laugh sometimes :)
I just thought Salazar might have a mischieveous streak in him, and I wanted to show an unexpected fun side to him. And Helga loves finding things to admire about people.
Thanks for the suggestions about things to add! I would love to make this work better as a stand-alone, so your tips are greatly appreciated. And I'm always looking to get more readers. The Founders section of HPFF can get a little lonely sometimes :) Thanks again for the great feedback.
This review made my day, thank you so much! I'm glad we got to do this, because I really enjoyed reading your story too. Thanks again!