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Review:adluvshp says:
Here for Slytherin review tag!

Ah, I loved this one-shot!! You have crafted Lily so wonderfully, it just seems so much like her, its perfect! I loved all the reflections she went through, about Snape, and later about James. The ending had a humorous edge to it in a way, of her finding the idea of going out with James outrageous, when we know she does it later on. The way Lily's thought-process went, I didnt feel much sympathy with Snape and could almost agree with her every thought, which is a feat seeing that I always manage to somehow sympathise with Snape.

Your descriptions were nicely crafted, and I enjoyed the plot and the concept this one-shot revolved around. The whole idea of "dumping a friend" and Lily executing it, and thinking over it, was nicely done.

So, I have to say, this was a very well-written story, and I really enjoyed reading it. All your characterisations were spot-on (I loved Remus here too), and your over all narrative was lovely. The pace, flow, structure, and grammar was all perfect too.

Great work!!

10/10

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Wow, thank you! I have always felt sympathy for Snape, myself, but I really wanted to try and capture how Lily would feel in that moment.

I also wanted to establish a tiny glimmer of interest in James, since I couldn't imagine her shifting from totally hating him to marrying him -- I've always figured there had to be something there.

I'm glad you liked Remus, too. I have a tendency to worm him into everything I write, and I thought that Lily might sympathize with him as a fellow outsider.

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! :)


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