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Review:The Misfit says:
Hi - it's me again! :) I'm sorry for the lateness of this review; RL got hectic yesterday!

The very first line of your story instantly captured my attention, which was really good! I like how you never mention outright that it's Rose, but instead reveal her identity by slipping little clues into the story - that she's Albus' cousin, has red hair and has blue eyes.

I love how you've characterized her, giving her a mixture of Ron and Hermione's qualities, which is fantastic! :D You've also done well to avoid the cliches of them getting together at school, and of Rose being this super-confident person - you've written her realistically here, with her insecurities at being single.

I'd suggest including some backstory to explain why Rose and Scorpius didn't get together at school. :)

This was a really sweet one-shot, well done! ♥

Author's Response: I have thought of writing another oneshot to go off of this, explaining why they never got together in school but I just have not gotten around to it yet. I'm glad that the first line was able to hook you and make you want to continue reading. With this story, I never wanted to come right out and say who is it but have it pretty obvious through clues in the story. The fact that you liked my characterization of Rose is so wonderful and I'm very glad. Feeling alone and left out is never a great feeling and when you are surrounded by people who are happy and with someone it can feel like they are just flaunting it in your face. Thank you so much for the wonderful review!

Slytherinchica08~


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