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Review:Jchrissy says:
Hi darling! I thought I'd come back for the second chapter of this, I was thinking about it earlier and then, well, here I am :P

Oh gosh. That last line. It's not like we didn't know where this is going, but it still made my heart stop. I've been with my fiance for four years, we are very responsible adults, but there are the times when something happens that makes you wonder... and it's a very terrible feeling so I can't help but just feel bad for Poor Al :(.

Let's back up though, before the realization that his earth may have just shattered, I still felt so bad for Al! Waking up in his best friends bed in a less than just friendly way. And then Lexi yelling at him for imagining it after they just go over pretending it didn't happen! That was awesome and just had me giggling.

I also have to tell how much I appreciate you making this a 'one night leading to a baby' kind of story and letting it just be that. I feel like sometimes with these stories people get so set on it being original, that they try too hard and cloud the entire story and ruin what should be a fun drama. You used two people who would probably have the hardest time dealing with this: two best friends. I love that it wasn't a random hook up, but it also wasn't a devoted significant other. And I love that you're making Lexi a real person, with the first chapter and this second that her dad knocks on the door and interrupts. Not that any of them know that there's a very real possibility that she has the makings of a child in her.. haha.

But anyway, the fact that you've already included her family shows that they'll probably be there from the start of the two pink lines. And that's something that is completely underdone. I get pretty annoyed reading a teenage pregnancy where the adults don't find out until the girl is in her 9th month or something, so I'm excited that you've already set the state with giving her a solid bond with her father.

Okay, I'll stop rambling now :P I absolutely enjoyed this chapter thought and look forward to the next!

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