Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:Violet Gryfindor says:
Oooh, this is chilling! You've done very well at setting a dark, eerie tone for this story. You describe just enough to sketch an outline of the place and the premise, but leave so much more for the reader's imagination (and curiosity!) to play with. It not only makes me want to read more, it also heightens the horror because the monsters remain unknown, abstract shadows that are more frightening than any real creature. It makes for an incredibly effective introduction - a hook to drag readers in and force them to turn the page... only there's no page to turn... yet. ;)

It's been a little while since I last read something of yours, but I have to say that you've improved a lot over the last two years. Your descriptions are really good - vivid and engrossing - and your use of the first person is strong in this prologue. Although there's not that much to go on, I still have a feel for how this character could turn out as the story progresses. The reference to the invisibility cloak makes it explicit that they're a Potter, but I can also see it in the language and style. This character has a real fighting spirit which I have a feeling will help drive the remainder of the story. I may be wrong, but this is just what I'm getting from this prologue.

I enjoyed reading this and look forward to seeing more! It sounds like it will be an exciting story to follow. :D

Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Repeat the number: 227
Submit Report: