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Review:my_voice_rising says:
Hello! I have recovered from the English Breakfast Soup dilemma and am here with your review. :3 I've wanted to read this story for a long time and am glad that I'm able to now!

Wow, what a refreshing narrative. I feel like you capture the essence of the time period and its high society so well. Although at first I thought some of the dialogue was verging on running on to long, it fits completely with the tone. I can recall reading similar dialogue in literature from Austen to Tolstoy and I have to say I am really impressed with how you've conducted this. I saw in a previous review response that Fee also went on like that because she was so adamant that she didn't feel like she could be interrupted. I can totally see that in reading it.

I am interested to see how Fiona develops. I'm unsure of her right now, and I mean that in a good way. She's very mysterious without being dramatically so... she just seems to be the perfect embodiment of high pureblood society.

I like her idea of what she wants in a man (during the time and social class I'm sure this was considered to be radical feminism) but at the same time, I wonder why she feels like she needs one so desperately in the first place? She just seems so intriguing right now. Two men are fighting over her, it seems, but Irma detests her. She is friendly to those she cares about, but still retains her hierarchical worldview when she admonishes a House Elf for daring to speak. The fact that her last name is Phoenix and that she is strikingly beautiful and was born on Halloween makes me wary--but then I don't feel like we're supposed to really like her. Does that make sense? I really mean all of this as a compliment; all in all, I think you're setting up the perfect candidate for Tom Riddle to fall in love. (That's who I assume the letter is from, btw!)

I really like Orion the best, I think. He's certainly caught in a tough place with knowing the secrets of Walburga's problems but not wanting Alphard to be upset. Speaking of Alphard, I am interested to hear more about him. He's so austere but is bold enough to make rude comments about Fee and her men (so I assume she's a bit of a heartbreaker, too?)

A wonderful job. You've captured the tense and altogether fragile feeling of how I imagine these "noblest houses" to be; the tensions between people that due to social restraints go unsaid, the secrets, the lies.

I love it! ♥

Author's Response: Hello! Oh yes, the English Breakfast Soup. :3 Ooh, I'm glad you're finally here! XD

Thank you so much! I wanted to write a story that fitted in somewhat with the pure-blood hierarchy at its finest, and I'm honoured at the comparisons with Jane Austen! XD

I agree - and yes, it would probably be considered radical feminism. However, Fee wouldn't admit what she really wanted in a man to someone that wasn't her best friend, so the feminist side of her is somewhat concealed. As for why she feels she needs a man so much - the pure-blood world hasn't caught up to the concept of independent women waiting for the right man. Fee's position as an Auror (in chapters three onwards) is in a grey area, but for her to remain a part of the society she lives in, she'd have to marry well. As for the two men - yes, they are fighting over her, but for different reasons and that's all I'm saying for now. Yes, you absolutely make sense and I know what you mean. Thank you! - although, I am planning on keeping this story canon, and since it's canon that Tom can't fall in love, that isn't happening. There are other emotions similar to love though, so I wouldn't give up on the Tom/OC pairing just yet! ;) (And you've already read the next chapter so you'll know that it can't be him.)

Perhaps that's because we haven't seen much of Orion's personality yet. :P I think you got Orion and Alphard mixed up though - Alphard knows about Walburga's alcoholism whereas Orion doesn't. Yet. And I think I mentioned this in another review response - Fee didn't date any more than any other girl her age did, or indulge in excessive impropriety, but Alphard is exaggerating because in his biased opinion, it feels like more.

Thank you so much! That was what I set out to do, so it's fantastic to hear that I was successful! ♥

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