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Review:Gabriella Hunter says:

Its me, Gabbie (Also known as Queen of the Underworld) with your requested review and its nice to meet you. I always make sure to be polite before I get right into the review! :D
Now, to destroy this! Hahah, I'm kidding.
Am I?
Anyway, I liked the way you had your Remus. He seems like any other boy and aside from him turning into a werewolf, he actually has other worries that make him very realistic. Somehow, I got the feeling that he doesn't really seem to match up against Sirius and James, Sirius even more so when his crush obviously fancies him. I thought that you played on the boy's dynamics really well here and you hint at problems with their characters that I thought was really well-done. Usually, those sort of issues, like James and the rest being bullies to Snape and a little condescending towards their own, would have been avoided. But you didn't shy away from that! I enjoyed all the banter between them though, I thought it was all hilarious and I was able to get a good grip on their personalities and Remus's narration is spot on. He seems stuck between wanting friends and knowing that he's wasting his time and might be lonely without them.
Perhaps you'll play on this later?
Anyway, I thought his feelings for Ruby were a little too adorable. He seems so shy that I can't imagine how he'll ever be able to buck up the courage and talk to her! And Sirius, really? I don't really think I like the thought of him flirting with Ruby when he knows that Remus likes her. But then again, Sirius comes off as kind of full of himself, which Remus says so himself more than once.
The girls that you introduced were very different but seem to get on pretty well. Lily doesn't seem to want to be bothered but I think she likes James a little more than she thinks because she sat through Sirius's idea! Hehehe. Although I'm not really interested in Ruby, as she seemed kind of shallow in my opinion and Remus belongs to me, I was pretty curious about June Bennett. I'm hoping that you'll play around with her character more, I sense that there's more going on with her. I just hope Remus notices! D':
As for CC's! Dum, dum! I think your pace was good and your characters were really well thought out. Some of your sentences I think could be shorter but other than that, I really enjoyed it! :3
Thanks for the read!
Much love,

Author's Response: Hey there!
Thanks so much for the awesome review! Your feedback really made my day so I really appreciate it.
Aw, I'm glad you liked Remus! I've never written him, or any of the other Marauders before so it was definitely a challenge!


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