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Review:Luke says:
I really did love this story, it was very unique in the presentation of two time periods and the contrast it allowed between Remus' childhood and adulthood.

There were some great creative moments that you took a hold of in this story and you used the canon that Jo created to a really great degree, I was worried that it would go against the canon what with Addie and present day Remus, but you really did find a way to use it to your advantage. Moments of revelation such as the meaning of Luna's name and Remus' own struggle with the patronus were particularly touching.

The way you've created Remus was great, it did lead me wanting to know the specifics of what came next in his life and though I know we got it in your one shot, you really did succeed at making your readers (at least this one) want more.

I think in some places the beginning sections of the chapters felt a little bit to convenient, it was a bit like "Ok... story time" and I think a bit more exploration of Remus and Luna's relationship couldn't have hurt, even if we got to see outside that office, perhaps Remus defending Luna from some Slytherin bullies. I think it was an area that could have been expanded upon beyond it's role as a framing device for the Marauders era tale.

Overall though you've constructed a wonderful tale that had me keep coming back to check for updates that was done in a really touching and unique way. I think this gamble with a new style of writing (the flashbacks) has definitely paid off and I'd love to see some more experimentation with it in your fanfiction.

And with that I bid you congratulations on another masterful story and move onto the latest work that you've been releasing which actually had me visibly ecstatic.

10/10 :)

Author's Response: I'm really glad you enjoyed the story! I was unsure about the time changes at first, and went through a variety of ideas on how to do it before settling on this one. So I'm very happy that you think it worked well.

My biggest fear about this was that it would seem off-canon, because I am very into canon and rarely, if ever, stray from it. The exception is in my Albus stories, when I use my own Weasley cousins. But that is only because when I started writing those Jo hadn't given us the Weasley family tree yet. But for this, I very much wanted to stick with canon, which is why I had them break up. But at the same time, I didn't want them breaking up over Remus's lycanthropy.

I've always thought there was some connection between Luna's name and the fact that Remus is a werewolf, ever since I first read OotP. It just seems too coincidental and with Jo's writing, things are never just coincidental! I'm really glad you liked the way I used that in this story.

I love Remus! It was really fun getting to explore his character in this story. I'd love to write more, although my next project will most likely be the 5th Albus story.

The "story time" thing was completely intentional. I wanted the flashbacks to Remus's time at Hogwarts to seem like stories he was telling Luna. For some reason I never thought of bringing Remus and Luna outside the office, though. That's a really good idea!

I'm really glad you enjoyed the story! The flashbacks were really fun to do and I'll definitely consider them (and other experimentation) for future stories. Thanks so much for reading and leaving this wonderfully detailed review! :)


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