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Review:fauxthefox says:
Hi! This is Faux from the forums with your requested review. Your request looked so unusual that I decided to read it right away. The problem, I'm not really sure what to tell you except that this is by far the best story I've ever read here, and I've been hanging around hpff for years.

Your characters are perfect - you give a good sense of the mother and father just by describing the pictures of them, and a good sense of Dennis from his narration. A mark of the professionalism of this story is that the narration style actually characterizes the narrator. I haven't read many stories like that here.

I did notice some small spelling/grammar errors like told me there were, but they were in no way distracting from the beauty of the story.

You seemed worried that it was confusing, but I don't think it is at all. I love that you don't actually state anything about Collin's death until Dennis is telling his parents - the whole story happens like real life, not like a story at all.

My favorite line was this: "Everything's always moving...but sometimes, just for a split second, things stop. Just for that moment, and then click! It all makes sense."

I also loved Collin's description of his time being Petrified, because that's something that was never addressed in the novels and that frankly I'd never thought about before. This entire story was completely unique, BEAUTIFUL, captivating, and heartbreaking (I had to give myself a few minutes to cry before I could even write this review). Your characters and the relationships between them are incredibly lifelike.

10/10. But if there were a 20/10 I would happily give it to you.

Faux.

Author's Response: asjkddkjsfhlj;hajksfh ohmygod THIS REVIEW. This...aaahh...gahh...I'm just so...THANK YOU SO MUCH MY GOODNESS. Gah, I am half grinning half sobbing (grobbing?!?) with pure happiness at this amazing review. And your wonderful comments!

I can't even write a coherent response. You've given me some SERIOUS PRAISE! And thank you SO SO much for recommending my story in the "Quality Stories" thread; that was just amazing and I'm truly honoured by that.

I was heavily influenced by the short story I mentioned in the disclaimer, so it's not an original idea at all - in that story the narrator is also looking at a bunch of photographs taken by her recently deceased mother. I read that story quite a few years ago...and suddenly it came to mind not too long and I thought of Colin as an amateur photographer. And so I used the idea xD Yeah, so much for originality of idea :p

I'm so glad you liked that line! It's quite a crucial line in the story because it ties up with the ending when Dennis takes that photograph in the fireworks scene :D

And I'm incredibly relieved and happy that you thought the characterisation of not just Colin and Dennis but their parents as well were convincing and realistic! I did have to go into a lot of detail about them just to make sure they weren't just flat one dimensional figures in the story!

And I'm glad you didn't find it too confusing, or the writing style too obscure! I'm quite particular about writing drama...I don't want things to be too melodramatic and over-the-top, and I like a lot of "showing" (almost to an extreme, actually) rather than "telling". So I'm glad despite all that there wasn't too much confusion.

And yes, the grammatical errors. Gah. A result of late night editing :p I was too eager to put the fic into the queue! I'm about to post an edited and cleaner version again!

Thank you so so much once again, I don't think I could thank you enough. I'm so very glad you liked it and it made you feel a little for the characters!

-teh


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