I finally felt it was time to write a review for this chapter. I read it as soon as it came out (well, almost as soon, because I have so much work around my college and I'm just so overwhelmed) and it took me some time to think about it.
First of all, my condolences for all of your losses. I feel with you, and I hope you will get better in time. I've read your other story, influenced by your losses, and it aches me a lot to see how much you've suffered. Remember what Sirius said to Harry - the ones that love us never really leave us, and you can always find them in your heart. I hope that quote will be comforting for you, as it is my favorite quote that helps me deal with loss of loved ones. Now, back to the chapter.
You amaze me more and more with every new chapter you write. All of the emotions you weave in your story are palpable, and so sensually described, anyone can feel what a certain person is going through. And yes, I wrote a person, not a character, because, for me, you made all of them come to life, and they are so much more than just a name in a book. They are living, breathing people with everyday problems and miseries.
The coldness in Lucius' posture made me shudder, for I could hear his voice ordering and making Draco comply with his wishes and orders. Yes, I understand that Voldemort would kill them if Draco failed, but Lucius isn't afraid for his son or wife, he is afraid for himself. Such a person, detached from his family, a cold-blooded murderer, no wonder Draco grew up to be as he was. I am so glad he found love and let it melt away the decay in his heart and soul.
I've always admired Narcissa somehow. She had to endure her unloving, clinical husband and do all she could to protect her only beloved son from any harm that may come his way. Now your story made me admire Narcissa even more. She is an incredible person, thanks to your amazing writing skills.
And Goyle! Must I even mention that part of the story?? Always have I been disgusted by him, but now, you shed a new light on him. He is an unloved, rejected person who is simply seeking for something all people need - love. And that's the only thing he can't find. I had to sympathize with him, I felt so sorry for him. I hope you will write some sort of a happy end for him, where he'll find his love, because, at the end of the day, we all need it and deserve it, no matter what.
I don't think I need to review the last part of the story, when Hermione goes to visit Draco. I've already written about extraordinary chemistry between them which you create. All I can say is I can't wait for the next chapter. I'm not sorry for writing this long review, because I want you to know how wonderful a writer you are. Thank you for creating this beautiful story for us to read and live in.
Author's Response: Ilovecookies,
Well, as you can see, I can fully understand how busy people can be, as it has been an embarrassingly long time since you wrote this wonderful review. I should've responded to you long ago, but it seemed everytime I tried, I'd be at a loss for words. Please forgive me for taking so long.
Thank you so much for your condolences and for the the quote. It's a great one and certainly helps.
Thank you for the comments on the emotions with people vs. characters. It is an amazing compliment to me as an author to portray those feelings as real. And "misery" is a perfect word to describe it.
Lucius is really cold in this chapter. You are so right. I wanted him to kind of place false blame on Draco, or guilt really. And I think it worked so that Draco deciding to go through with the task is still believable.
Oh yes, Narcissa... I think she would have to be brave in lying to Voldemort for her son. I think she's an intriguing character, for sure.
Ah, Goyle. I'm so glad that you mentioned him. He is my favorite part of this chapter. I wrote a side of him that can lie hidden deep within a man... the longing to be loved by someone. I do have my plans for him.
Thank you dearly for your wonderful review. Please forgive me for taking so long. It is always the good ones that are the hardest to respond to.
Your words truly warm my heart and are so very encouraging. I appreciate your continuous reviews. Thank you so much,
From my heart,