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Review:magnolia_magic says:
Hi aquablue! I'm here for our review swap! :)

This was such a roller coaster! I had fun keeping up with all the twists you pack into this first chapter. At first I had a lot of questions (Why is she getting married if she doesn't want to? Are the Malfoy children non-canon?), but you answered them all by the end. And speaking of the end, I love the way you conclude this chapter. It has a really ominous tone, and it's going to do a great job of pulling your readers in. Awesome job there!

There were some spelling errors that distracted me. The one that struck me most was when I'd see "Ya" instead of "Yeah." I think writing out the full word would make this look much more polished, and you won't lose any of the spunk that Amber has in her dialogue :)

I loved the way you went back and forth between the past and the present. It was so much fun! Like I said, it felt like a roller-coaster. I hope I can get to know your characters better in future chapters; there was so much going on in this one that characterization had to take a back seat to the action-packed plot. But I like what I've seen of Amber and Draco so far, and I look forward to seeing more :)

Thanks again for swapping with me! I think you've got a good start here...keep it up!

--Maggie

Author's Response: Hey Maggie!

Thank you so much for the review! Im glad you liked the chp!

Alright I'll keep the spelling errors in mind :P

Im glad you like the characters! You will really get to meet them in chp 3 =)


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