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Review:Courtney Dark says:
Hello again-thanks for re-requesting!

I loved the way you started this chapter, leading on from the last one. You honestly have a style of writing that is so gripping and so hooking that it just makes you want to keep reading! You also have a wonderful way with words, such as in this sentence: 'The match had gone on for so long that by the time that they had reached the castle, the torches had been lit, and the already dim sunlight had been almost completely blocked out by the thick layer of angry clouds.' I love little details and descriptions like this-I feel they really lift up your story to the next level.

I also liked the addition of Brienne's class learning to do the Patronus Charm in Defence Against the Dark Arts. After all, they had just had an encounter with the dementors and so this definitely seems like something the fifth years would learn, so that was a nice touch. And Brienne's conversation with Lupin was very intriguing. I can't wait to find out more about this investigation and I am asking so many questions about what is going on here. I love how you add dashes of mystery here and there. It makes the whole thing so much more exciting!

I thought the lines: 'I think you mean Brianna Christie, Trelawney replied condescendingly,

I think you mean Brienne Christie, Fred said, in a half-mocking impersonation of Trelawney' were great! Very in character for both Trelawney and Fred, and a nice way to add in a little bit of humour in what is a largely somber chapter. I also thought it was very in character how McGonagall said; ''In the matter of a death in the family, any fraternizing with the Ministry, at your young age, is a very precarious manner' because it definitely reminded me of her disapproval of the Ministry in later books.

The way you ended this chapter was absolutely perfect, and really showed how much Brienne has grown as a character since being at Hogwarts. I can't wait to find out what happens next!

Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks for coming back! I'm glad you like this chapter too.

A lot of readers have said they're not sure if McGonagall is completely in character, so I've really worked at it, it means a lot to me that you think she's right :)

Thank you again for the brilliant review!


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