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Review:magnolia_magic says:
Hi Shaza! Thanks so much for swapping with me :)

Honestly, this caught my eye simply because of the title. I like anything with a mystical, sort of mysterious feel, and I thought this would do the trick. And I'm so glad I picked it, because it was so sweet! I especially loved the connection Luna has with her mother's memory. I love the idea that she still guides her daughter even though she's passed away.

I can definitely see Luna's mother being the type of person who reads tarot cards and uses their guidance in life. I'm glad it worked for Luna, too. I really like the way you've shown her fondness for her friends and her desire to do something special for them. That seems just like the Luna we know and love from the books :)

The ending seemed a little abrupt to me, almost like you cut off in the middle of a moment instead of seeing it through to the end. Does that make sense? I would have liked to see this story expanded a little, maybe a little more about her emotions and thoughts as she sees her finished paintings? Or even circling back to a final thought about her mother. I think a little more detail at the end would help this feel more complete. The lead-up to the ending was so enjoyable I just wanted to see more! That's always a good thing :)

I really enjoyed this! Thanks again for the swap, and I hope to read more of your work soon!

--Maggie

Author's Response: Hey there!
Yeah, I just thought Luna would still look to her mum for influence even though she wasn't there.
I'm glad you think I've got Luna right, I'd never written her before and I wasn't too sure I could get her write, so thank you!
I'll go back thorugh and see if I can edit the ending a bit, thanks for pointing that out!
Thank you for the review! :)


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