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Review:AlexFan says:
Okay, so I'm reviewing this chapter and I'm so sorry for taking such a long time to get to this but I'm here writing it so that's something.

Anyway, I think you may have a little age malfunction because last I remember, Lily was two years younger than Albus. That's what it said in the epilogue in Deathly Hallows anyway.

I'm also wondering how exactly Cassie is going to learn six year's worth of spells, theories and potions in a few weeks. I'm pretty sure she's going to need a really good tutor to help her.

The part where you were talking about how McGonagall was a tough Headmaster, I'm pretty sure you meant Headmistress because we both know that McGonagall is a female and not a male.

I love that there's a lot of description in the story but there's not too much so that you end up getting bored.

I love Lily, she's nice but at the same time she's git sass and she doesn't beat around the bush when it comes to telling people the truth. But I also like the fact that she's encouraging to Cassie and doesn't treat her like she's stupid.

Lily actually reminds me of Ginny which I thought was really great since you said that Lily looked a lot like Ginny and she also acts like Ginny a lot too.

Awarrior, oh my God I started laughing at that. Cassie's ignorance of the Wizarding World is endearing but at the same time it's just so damn hilarious when she describes it because it's completely different to how everyone else refers to things.

The part where Harry started telling his story was hilarious. I was laughing so hard, Harry sounds like he's 90 and he talks about Voldemort as if he were a nephew of his that made bad decisions.

I didn't see and grammar or spelling errors as far as I could tell so great job on that. As for Albus and Cassie becoming something more, I can see it but I think you should take it slow and real so that Cassie learns more about Albus and what type of person he is. Plus, she just got cheated on, I don't think Cassie would really trust anyone in the romantic sense, I think Albus would have to show her that he isn't like her ex-boyfriend.

Anyway, that's just what I think. To sum up everything that I've said, this was a great chapter and you did an awesome job of it. I'll review chapter four when I have time again but keep a look out for the review.

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