Hey it's patronus_charm with your review :)
It was good that you put the timeframe in, because I often find it confusing if the story just suddenly jumps forward and you have no idea where it's set. It would have been nice, if you wrote a little more in detail about those 4 months, e.g. her thoughts and feelings, but it's only a minor thing!
I saw this randomnly towards the top - nbsp; - I think it may be a formatting error as that happens to me, it just looked weird!
No poor Fred, I thought it was good to include that. As the quidditch team were really close, so I always wondered how they were affected by the death of one of them.
It was horrible seeing Katie nearly give up, you just wanted to will her on, and say don't worry Harry does kill Voldemort. I thought that was written very well, as it made me want to cry as I hate seeing someone in such a bad way like Katie was. Then it was so lovely to see her want to carry on fighting, and when she said configro, I wanted to cheer for her that she got her strength back.
I thought that scene with Oliver and Colin was adorable. When I read it in the book, I thought there had been more to him just moving bodies, so it was nice to have a backstory. You write death so well, you're making me cry through out this whole chapter :'(
I thought this was a beautiful chapter, even though the main subject of it was death. I liked how you showed how deeply affected they were by Lavender's death, even though they didn't know her, it just shows what a bond war makes. I really enjoy reading this story so feel free to re-request when the next one's up, Kiana :)
Author's Response: Hey! Sorry for taking so long to respond -- I've been laptop-less for a few days, and trying to even log on to HPFF is a pain in the bum when I'm on my phone.
Oh yeah, I definitely think that was something that bothered me, about the whole four months thing. I meant to fill it in a bit more, but I wasn't quite sure what to fill it in with, if that makes sense? I had a couple of scenes in mind but wasn't totally sure about it. I will definitely bear that in mind, though, and might write an extra scene.
Okay, I will edit that as soon as I can :) Also, yeah, I know, Fred's death is something that affected a lot of people, especially the Quidditch team. I'm glad you appreciated that. And it wasn't nice to write about Katie almost giving up, but I liked writing Katie finding some strength, though, even if she did kill someone in the process D:
Yay, I'm so glad you liked the scene between Oliver and Colin! There was definitely a lot more to the scene than just the two of them carrying bodies, yeah. And eep, sorry for making you cry :( But I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Anyway, thank you for the review and sorry sorry sorry for the grossly late reply D: