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Review:academica says:
I noticed that your chapter titles aren't all even; some of them are capitalized and some aren't. It's no big deal, but you may want to fix it just so it looks good.

Poor Hermione! I'm really happy for Ginny, getting asked out by Harry, but I can imagine that it must have hurt to hear that when Ron is still with Lavender. I also felt really bad for Hermione in the scene with Draco, because she was just trying to help and he was really mean to her (as expected). I definitely don't see a romance happening between them at this point, so it'll be interesting to see how that develops in the later chapters.

One thing I did notice is that it seems like Draco calls Hermione "Granger" and Hermione calls Draco "Malfoy" in most of the dialogue. I think you could probably reduce that a little; try to think of it like two regular people talking. If we were having a conversation, I wouldn't say "Erika" at the end of every sentence, and you wouldn't say "Amanda" at the end of every sentence, right? That's all :)

Moving on to chapter seven!


Author's Response: Hey Amanda! Wonderful to have one of your reviews again! I'm sorry that its taken this long to respond to this review! I fell so far behind on responding but I'm finally here! Anyways, I do appreciate this review very much! There isn't going to be much for a dramione romance happening any time soon though they will friendlier as the chapters go on. I will make sure to take a look at the dialogue and replace or take out completely all the times that I refer to them by last name while they are talking. Thanks again for the review!


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