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Review:Gabriella Hunter says:
Hello!

Hey, doll, its Gabbie here with your requested review and we're back to Thalia, though this is from Sirius's POV. Its nice getting into his head, I always imagined that it was a tough thing to figure out what went on there. I think you've shown him pretty well and I'm hoping to get more information on his life soon! The fact that he and James are intent on pulling pranks before even starting classes says alot about him. Its sort of careless but he's the sort that might pull through when he has to. I really did laugh at the argument with Thalia though, I sort of wanted to know more about how he felt about her. Thalia gave such a detailed description of him in her POV that I wanted the same for Sirius, perhaps there's some attraction on his side? :3
I was surprised with how short this was though! I sort of thought you might keep going on but I think you're going to include more information and action in the next few chapters. Hopefully. :3
I'm wishing James luck in his wooing of Lily, though it isn't going over very well. :p
I liked the last bit with Sirius referring to Hogwarts as home. It reminded me of Harry and made me all fuzzy on the inside, so good job!
As for CC's, I think you need a few periods to break up some of your sentences and there was a "ran" where there should have been "run". Other than that, thanks for the read! I'll be back and thanks for the lovely reviews you gave me on Abandon!
Much love,
Gabbie

Author's Response: Hey Gabbie! Thank you for another lovely review, I've actually read the other people's pieces of work which you reviewed, and I have to agree they are amazing! Yeah I know, my first chapters aren't very long, as these were written back in the day when I thought writing over 1000 words was a triumph. I don't know now, how I could have made them so small! About his thoughts on Thalia, I didn't think about putting that in, but it's a really good idea, I'll go back and put a sentence or two in, and correct the other errors you pointed out! Yeah there definitely is a lot more action and info in the next chapters, I really want to go back to my earlier self, and tell it to write more! Yeah I noticed that for several characters e.g. Voldy, Sirius, Snape and Harry, that Hogwarts was more of a school for them, so I wanted to point that out, as that's probably why he and Harry got along so well! Thanks again for the review! Kiana!x

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