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Review:FredWeasleyIsMyKing says:
Hello! Laurenzo7321 here with your requested review :)

Oh, I'm so glad you requested this story! I've heard nothing but praise for it but with RL getting in the way and other requested reviews I haven't had the chance to get round to read it. It really hasn't disappointed either, I loved it!

The way you split Remus and the wolf up but they were still in contact with each other was amazing! Remus was so full of pain in the first bit, I loved how he refused to give in and give up his humanity. It was just... very Remus. You have his character spot on and it was honestly just so good to read. You then completely contrasted this with the wolf's instinctive personality and anger at being kept caged up, giving us the split personality and it worked so well. It made it feel so real.

The line you write about his heightened sense helping him sneak around with the other Marauders was great - it made me smile! I love little one liners like that!

I think your description of Remus transforming was written really well. I had vivid images the whole way through. You really got across the pain and the reluctance of the whole transformation across so just a huge well done to you!

You really wrote the wolves perspective well too. I like how he saw everything in terms of territory and packs and instantly singled Peter out as the 'runt'. My heart was literally stopping when he wanted to kill James! I liked how the combination of Sirius finally taking the submissive position and Lupin telling the wolf they were friends stopped him from doing any bad. I think the 'nagging voice' just reinforced that Lupin does still have some restraint over the wolf which was good.

I haven't really got anything in the way of CC as I loved everything the way it was. The one thing I would perhaps mention is McGonagall repeated 'Mr Lupin' a lot at the start but then using 'Mr Lupin' was in canon for her.

Amazing chapter anyway, I honestly loved it. I hope you re-request but if not I'm sure I'll be back around to read more as soon as possible!

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Heya!

Finally here with your response! I'm going to keep it short unfortunately...a cut on my finger is making typing very hard and painful. Hahaha, silly knives like human blood! XD

Remus's humanity is very important to him. He grew up in a society that viewed werewolves as uncontrollable animals and not as a human beings with a problem. With every transformation, Remus has to remind himself that he is, indeed, still human...just with a furry little problem. I never imagined myself writing a werewolf story let alone dwell deeply into just one character however, writing about Remus has been quite fun! Specially Wolf, who is just the opposite of what Remus is. They may share the same body but that doesn't mean they actually like each other.

JKR said that being a werewolf was like a disease however, I couldn't ignore the myths behind werewolves...I had to give him at least advanced hearing and sight!

Hahaha, James did indeed almost become a meal. Can you imagine if that had happened! Oh, not only the guilt but it is quite nasty...wonder if that would still be called cannibalism...Sirius is the only one Wolf identifies and trusts first because he's another canine. He had to become submissive otherwise he too would've become a meal or at least attacked very badly. Remus is still sorta there...he just shuts himself away from Wolf mentally speaking. However, thanks to the scents he was able to recognize his friends so he had to intervene.

I'll definitely be going back and taking another look at Minerva to stop her from repeating herself. XD

Thank you so much for your review! I already re-requested so I hope to see you soon!!! :D

Until next time!

--Rosie


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