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Review:Courtney Dark says:
You are seriously my favourite person in the world right now, for re-requesting all those times! I'm glad my reviews are of some use, even though I haven't given that much constructive feedback!

One of the (many) things I really enjoy about this story is that though you are often retelling events that happened in the Harry Potter books, you are able to tell them in a completely different way-a way that always has me hooked from the first sentence! I think part of the reason for this is that Brienne is such a great character-she's believable, she's real and above all else, she's likeable!

These dreams that Brienne is having are very mysterious. In stories dreams are often foreshadowing future events, and I find myself wondering whether this is the case for this story, too. I also liked the little mention of the large amount of homework at the beginning of the chapter. I think a lot of writers on this site forget that this is Hogwarts, a school which means studying and learning. And as Brienne is in her fifth year, that means her OWL's are coming up, which means a lot more work!

The mention of Snape teaching Defence Against the Dark Arts was great, and I like how you have remembered Fred's rather large grudge against him. I really liked this line of Fred's: '“That slimy old git.” Fred had declared as they were leaving their first DADA lesson since the night in the Great Hall. “He gave us eight feet to write about the bloody war with the Mongolian Vampires in the fifteen-hundreds! Surely there isn’t that much to say about how to kill a vampire, everyone knows just to chop off its head with a wooden sword. Simple!”' because it was just so in character-brilliant!

The addition of Sir Cadogan was a nice little detail you added in there and I enjoyed the conversation the gang had about Cedric Diggory, as I remember Angelina talking about him in the books. I thought it was especially adorable when: 'George’s head snapped up, with a look of annoyance that matched his brothers.' I just love the slowly growing dynamics between Brienne and George! And then George's line: '“Is that something that girls like?” he asked, nose wrinkled.' George is just perfect! And it's great that you are able to develop these characters and relationships at a very nice pace, and do not feel the need to rush anything.

I was glad to see Paisley again in this chapter. I think she's a very interesting character, though we do not know a lot about her yet-though I would like to learn more! And I thought you wrote the Quidditch game extremely well-especially the part with the dementors. It was very clever how you incorporated the flashback in an unconventional way, rather than just writing 'Flashback to one year ago' as I've seen a lot of authors do before! And the very last sentence: 'She was still in the staff room, hundreds of miles and a whole world away, being told of the death of her mother' was very powerful, and left me wanting more!

How are all your chapters so amazing? Share the talent, please!
Courtney:)

Author's Response: Hi! I think if I'd had the worst day in the world I could read one of your reviews and feel like a million bucks xD There is really no wonder why I rerequest! I think you tap into what some other readers don't aswell :)

Yeah, I don't want it to be boring by describing the events in the same way that JKR does (though her descriptions are obviously the benchmark of quality). When the books go on and Fred and George are featured more it may just get more difficult but I will find a way to sort it :)

Thank you very much for your review xD



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