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Review:adluvshp says:
Hey!! Here for your requested review!! I am so happy you asked me to read this, I loved it (of course I may be a tad biased, being a Slytherin myself) xD

Since you asked for general comments, I am not going to go into much detail, and anyway you can't really edit this, so it's okay. Moreover, I really don't have any CC to give you - this was such a nice piece!

I really liked your plot and concept, of setting this in a Post-WWII Hogwarts, prejudiced against the Slytherins. It was a great idea to take on! I also liked the way you had crafted your OCs, they were very much like realistic 11-year-olds who felt so lost at all the apparent dislike they got. I liked how you incorporated both the good and the bad of our house in this piece, it was well-woven and thoughtful. I liked the ending especially, of Severus as the talking portrait, and the whole "shed your skin" thing. That was just perfect and I really loved it!

The grammar was a little off in places though, but I think that is acceptable. Apart from that, I didn't see any flaws at all. This had a nice pace and flow, and of course good characterisation, and a lovely narrative.

I think you did a great job with this, and it is fitting to be the first chapter to The Slytherin Project. I enjoyed reading this a lot, could totally connect with it, and think you're an awesome author.

9/10

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

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