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Review:FredWeasleyIsMyKing says:
Hello! Laurenzo7321 here with your requested review!

I thought this was a really interesting idea for a story, with Draco owing Harry. Then adding in the Grim Reaper was really original too!

The way you started the story had me instantly hooked and I loved the way you included the flashbacks to feed us the back story gradually, it worked really well!

Your characterisation of Amber was great, you really gave her some fight, standing up to the Grim Reaper like that! The triplets worked well together, I wasn't sure about them, especially Vi but she turned out quite nice in the end. I was a bit disappointed Harry didn't say a word throughout the chapter though, and James was a but quiet too - to say this wedding included Harry's children and James himself, I just thought they would have reacted a lot stronger.

I look forward to finding out more though, you've left a big mystery around the whole Draco father or uncle and the arranged marriage surely can't go smoothly.

One other thing is to watch the spaces between paragraphs - I know it's a pain and it happened to me the first time I posted but if you get chance to sort it out it makes it loads easier to read!

Great job!

Lauren

Author's Response: Hi Lauren! Thank you for doing this =)

Im glad you liked the idea and Amber!~

Ya the flashback isn't really done so we will get to see more of Harry and James in the background no worries =)

Ya it really is... I tried to fix it haha. didnt really work out.. oh well!

Thanks! Im glad you could review =)


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