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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hi! It's patronus_charm with your review, I'm glad you requested as I saw your status about this, so I'm eager to see how this turns out!

I loved your use of imagery and description in this story, as it meant I could really imagine the setting of the story. I think one of the best lines was - 'Her blonde hair was sticking to her forehead like seaweed', I never thought of comparing hair to seaweed before, and I have to say it is a pretty good similie!

I loved your characterisation of Victoire, it was nice to see that she wasn't the perfect person people usually depict her as, because that tends to get boring. I thought it was also interesting that you made Victoire an icon, for innoncence born out of grief, this was an interesting direction to go down. I guess you could say she was the phoenix, born from the ashes of the war, yet she can't handle the pressure of being the symbol of a new cycle.

I liked how Teddy just appeared, and the fact that he had always been there like 'the north wind', perhaps shows that he was always there to support, but it was only untill now that she realised he was there.

You say that you found a bit awkward, but I didn't find that at all and I've read quite a few Teddy/Victoire stories, and this was a really original read, and a different turn, to how they usually go! I really enjoyed that though!

I really enjoyed the end of the story as well, which showed Victoire, almost come to terms with the position she has in post-war Britain. It's as if, Teddy will help guide her through it.

Overall I thought this was a really good story, and I really couldn't believe you wrote this in the middle of the night as it's so good! I love the Romeo and Juliet title, as I love the play, and I found it really fitting! You should consider developing this to show more of the backstory to their relationship! Kiana :)

Author's Response: :P yah! I'm really pleased you liked this! I've never attempted Victoire as stated before and I haven't really ever been interested in it because i like minor characters and she isn't so much of one and Teddy/Victoire pairing is fairly popular too. I really did enjoy developing her though. I'm not sure why she'd always be portrayed as perfect - i suppose because of her mum but then there was Bill as the father and he hardly seemed mr perfect. More rugged i suppose. Also i've always imagined the next gen kids, especially the older ones as a bit more damaged than most authors portray them as. They grew up with stories of war and some of them would have still experienced seeing the after affects of it as a child and that can stay with a person if they know their father or mother having nightmares and having something close to PTSD or something. I like the phoenix analogy and i can't believe i didn't think of it until your review! But it fits perfectly!

Thank you so much for your lovely words! I didn't expect people to like this much because i wasn't sure if any of it really made sense (as it was insanely late when i put this together) Thank you so much again! I do hope one day soon to continue with this. It'll will definitely have some of the backstory but mostly it will probably be their future.

-zayne


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