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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey, it's patronus_charm from the review tag! I was glad that I could review, as I've just reviewed the next 2 chapters of Fate's Path, so I'm eager to see your other piece of work!

I think Eden's great character, as she seems really interesting, and her perception of the world is rather funny! I liked the home life you created, as it seemed, really loud, funny and friendly and you could tell how close they were! I also love all the childrens names, their unique to fit into the Potterverse, but not too unique to look weird!

I loved the Very Potter Musical hint with Pigfarts! Which is awesome!

I liked how you included some tension between the family with Trent unsure about Joe and Eden's hate for Danielle, as that makes the family dynamics more real.

Ooh Eden and James, I can definitely see something happening there! I liked it when Ryan swore on Harry Potter! I can't wait to see how this develops, as James isn't sterotypical here which is a nice change!

I liked all of your OC's and I thought they made a really friendship group, as they all seemed to fit together well. I'm intriguid by Jacob Malfoy, as any Malfoy is interesting!

Typo alert! Conjoined was split in 2 which is funny, given the meaning of the word! Also I don't think witches and wizards need a capital w, where as Italian/French/Brit need it!

Overall I though it was really good, and I'm glad that I read it! Kiana :)

Author's Response: Kiana, it's fate isn't it?

Eden is my ideal character! I've been trying to make a story with her in it for a while now, and I'm finally glad that I did.

I got the idea for the big family from my family. I have an exceptionally large family and so It was fun writing about a family with large families, as I could actually write about real life events that had happened to my family.

I'm glad you noticed Pigfarts! Pigfarts Pigfarts, here we come. Okay I'll stop.

James II is my favourite next gen character, so of course my next story was going to have him in it. ;)

I had fun planning out the group, as they were all individually different in their own way. It may not show now, but it will show soon.

That's it! As of now, I will re-read my story at least ten times to avoid any stupid errors.

Thanks again for reviewing this one Kiana! xo


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