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Review:FredWeasleyIsMyKing says:
Hey there :) Laurenzo7321 with you requested review!

So I thought this was a great start to your story! It has definitely drawn me in and has left plenty of unanswered questions, why she's moved to Hogwarts for instance, that I look forward to hearing more on.

I thought your characterisation was great throughout, with just a few lines I could tell which characters you meant. Luna was great, with her daddy calling the dementors 'Cloaked Farnzies' it just made me smile. It might have been nice to have a little more conversation with Luna, I know she's a bit of a day dreamer but they were on the train all day. I just enjoyed what you wrote and would have loved to have had a bit more!

I thought it was a bit mean making Brienne go to the castle and get sorted with the first years - I mean talk about making her stand out as the newbie! I guess she would have to be sorted though so there's no way around it - I just felt it was a bit harsh bless her!

Your imagery was lovely throughout and really made the story flow. The one place you could have maybe added a little more was with the dementors. They're supposed to make you relive your worst moments and you've built up Brienne's sadness so well I just thought she would have probably been affected slightly more, like Harry?

I do think this is a great chapter though, you certainly have my interest!

Well done,
Lauren

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you very much for the review!

It's nice to say you would like a little more in the chapter, which is always flattering. I will try to fill it up a little more with details :) And thanks for pointing it out!

Thank you again for the review!


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