Hey it's patronus_charm with your review, thank you for your lovely compliments, they really made my day!
I'm liking Astoria quite a lot she does seem rather different, by the fact that she never stays overnight despite living with Draco, and that fact he chose her freely. One thing I would like, is to perhaps have more of a backstory to her, e.g. how her and Draco got together and her family as I think that would be interesting. It did look weird having her note in speech marks, I think if you put it in italics it would look better:)
I really like Ginny and Hermione's friendship, and they interact with each othe so naturally, you can't help but love reading those two characters! They just seem so true to how JK wrote them which is really nice!
I sometims noticed that when you used bullet points, it would flow better if you used comma's instead, as then you don't take such long pauses in your head, and the the flow gets ruined.
I liked that though you changed Draco's personality, to make it softer, he still has that air of superiority in him, which you can see when he orders Hemione's food for her. I like this mixture as it's something familiar and something new!
I'm glad that we got some more details on Hermione's year long trip, as though we got some before this was a more in depth so we had greater reasoning as to why she disappeared!
Wahay! Reporters were there, I know it's mean, but I can't wait to see Ron's reaction to Hermione's new (sort of) beau, I mean no offense, but Draco is way more awesome than Ron, so when he finds I'm guessing he'll be very jealous and angry.
Overall I thought it was a really good chapter, and if you just look at the CC's it will be even better! As I really want to know what happens next I'll do the next chapter as well! Kiana :)
Author's Response: HI KIANA! I'm always so excited to see your reviews ;)
Astoria is a different character, she is completly unique. She's the most original character for me in the plot, eventhough she's canon.
I love writing Harry and Ginny. I imagine the way they would act, and I love writing it down! They're honestly the cutest couple in the whole of the series.
Draco, like any other normal human being, would be a little soft deep down. No matter how much he tried to denys it. Everyone's secretly soft about something, and I guess Hermione's what brings out his soft spot.
The details from the trips, was necessary, if you ask me. Of course theres a lot more to include later on, but we'll cross that bridge once we get there.
OF COURSE! Draco is definetly a billion times better than Ron. Ron is still my favourite Weasley though.
Thank you for the lovely review once again, Kiana! xo