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Review:teh tarik says:
Hello there, Elphaba!

I remember reviewing your first chapter many months ago...and I remember how evocative and descriptive it was. I'm back for more reading :) Really surprised here that I'm the only reviewer for this story - I've seen you reviewing quite a lot and you've got a flourishing review thread and all..anyway, I find your story really, really well-written and a bit of a mystery, actually, what with Clio's past, her grandfather working in the Dept. of Mysteries, her relationship with mentioned in the summary that this story is actually a sequel. I hope it won't affect my understanding of it too much if I start reading from here :)

Once again, you can really evoke a scene and bring it to life. There are just so many lovely descriptive details, from the Charmed flags, to the scents of the alleyway that Remus finds Sirius in, to the lovely playful moment between Bernie and Hanna. Some of the ideas were so original as well; I enjoyed the upside-down duel where the duelists were held in place by the Levicorpus charm...

Also, I find it really exciting that the story is situated within the Hogwarts era, after Sirius' escape from Hogwarts and with the Quidditch World Cup and Triwizard Tournament due to happen later in the year. Now that I think of it, it really is interesting to find out where Lupin was after he resigned from his position at Hogwarts. I'm glad that you're going to provide a bit of a story about that.

I think you pretty much portrayed Sirius and Remus' friendship very accurately. There's something very...poignant in that moment. Like two isolated people coming together. And I really adore Sirius' final line in that segment; it encapsulated his character and his voice so well:

"Oh Moony, Moony, Moony. What will we do with you?" Sirius patted his slumped shoulders as they walked. "Say, do you know somewhere close by where I could store a hippogriff? It'll only be for a few days, of course."

Ooh, love this. I do hope Sirius will play a bigger role in your story!

OK, well, I've really enjoyed this chapter! I'm intrigued to find out what will happen next, and the mystery behind Clio and Remus. I will come back to this story, and it won't take me as long as last time :P

Great work!


Author's Response: Aww, thanks! :) While this story is a sequel, I'm trying to make it so that you don't need to have read the first one to understand what's going on. I'm really glad that you're enjoying it, because that makes me think that so far I've been successful. I had been worried about people connecting with the first few chapters, especially with the Americans showing up, so I'm glad you liked the upside-down dueling and their antics in the tent, too. :)

Sirius will definitely show up again, and the mystery behind Remus and Clio should become clearer, as well.

I've been somewhat slow about updating this one (I ended up making a major change that necessitated some rewrites of later chapters) but it's really good to hear that you're reading it, and I will do my best to keep the story moving forward.

Thanks again!


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