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Review:800 words of heaven says:
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Well, the thing that stood out the most for me in this chapter, was Narcissa and her characterisation. I thought it was really well done!

In the first few lines, you managed to describe the quintessential pre-Sorting experience, with the sweaty palms and fast heartbeat, and all that, but what I really liked was that in those first lines, you also gave us an insight into the mind of eleven-year-old Narcissa in such a way that you could see her becoming the Narcissa we first meet in the books.

As the piece went on, I think you revealed different aspects of Narcissa's character as an adult through the mind of an eleven-year-old girl very skillfully. The line, “…she closed her eyes for a fleeting moment, wrinkled her nose like Bella had taught her,” really showed (to me, at least) that part of Narcissa that was nervous and afraid, and also that part of Narcissa that looked up to Bella. I think, these two parts of Narcissa war within her for a while during the series, and suggesting those aspects were already warring within her at such a young age, is quite insightful - it kind of makes you think that perhaps young Sirius might have felt the same way, at some point.

I also really enjoyed the ironic foreshadowing by the Hat at the end of this chapter - very clever, indeed!

A unique take on quite an intriguing character!

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing!

I am glad that you liked my characterisation of Narcissa!

Its good to know that you think I made the eleven-year-old Narcissa align with the one we see in the books.

Thank you for your thoughtful comments. I tried to reveal as much as I could about Narcissa, trying to foreshadow her future actions which we see in the books, so I am glad it worked!

The Hat's dialogues were a struggle to write so its great to know that you enjoyed it!

Thank you!

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