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Review:Courtney Dark says:
Hey there! I'm Courtney, here for your requested review:)

What a lovely one-shot! That is the first thing that comes to mind on completing this read. I think you have captured the essence of the Prince's Tale very nicely, and have used that to put your own, individual twist on things.

You have a very nice style of writing-especially with descriptions and imagery. I think the way you started off this one-shot was absolutely perfect. Not only did it set the mood and tone of the piece, but I could really feel myself there, at the scene with Snape. I thought the line: 'The whine of the hinges filled his ears as it echoed off the church and gravestones surrounding him' was especially brilliant. I don't know why, but it stuck in my mind for the whole piece. What I do know, is that you have described Godric's Hollow extremely well, so great work!

What we see of Snape's characterization in thos one-shot is great. I liked the line: 'His curtain of dark hair hung over his eyes as tears began to fall' as it really brought me back to the books-I remember Harry constantly describing Snape's greasy black hair, so I thought that was a great description, whilst also describing the emotion Snape felt at seeing Lily's grave.

I liked what the paragraph about the memories of Snape's childhood with Lily added to the story. It showed us the connection he had with Lily and where all this emotion was coming from, rather than just stating that he was upset. It's details like this that make a story so much more believable so I commend you for that.

Your introduction and portrayal of Dumbledore was honestly spot on-he really seemed, to me, the Dumbledore from the books, which I loved. And his interactions with Snape...perfect. I can see you have have drawn a lot of inspiration from the Prince's Tale for this one-shot, and you have done so very successfully. The line '"I should ask you the same question." He said pointedly, but with mild curiosity. "You see, in times like these, I find it best to examine all of the possibilities don't you Severus?"' was really great-I can definitely imagine Dumbledore saying something like that!

I liked the way you explained how and why Snape took the job as Potions master at Hogwarts, because that was never REALLY covered in the books. And the way you ended it, with the word 'Always' tied the one-shot together very nicely, which is always good. I did notice a few grammar and spelling mistakes here and there but nothing too distracting.

Thank you for the great read!
Courtney:)

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