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Review:AlexFan says:
I'm here to leave you that review you requested! . . . Two days ago . . . wow, I fail at being fast with my reviews.

At the end of the first part, before the flashback, "let me backtrack here. No need to get ahead of myself" I think a semicolon would've done the job instead of two different sentences.

I was actually thinking throughout this entire chapter that Amber's sister was really horrible but then I got to like her little by little. I think it was just her screaming in the morning that put me off.

"Get at me bro," do you mean "come at me bro?" Because if you do mean "get at me bro" then . . . well . . . this just got a little awkward didn't it.

MOVING ON!

Great job on the description, there was lots of it so the reader wasn't left wondering about things and some stories don't have enough description so yeah, great job on that.

You were doing the mystery in the chapter really well, it made me want to keep reading.

There was one part where it said "making us all shut up instantaneously," I think the word "instantly" would've done the same job as "instantaneously."

Your idea for the story is really unique ad I really like that so that's one of the reasons why I added this to my favourites.

I like how you switch between the present and the past. You're showing everyone what's happening but you're also showing us WHY it's happening.

I would just like to say that that was intense and I really liked this chapter and if I may be allowed to fangirl here for a minute: please update soon!

10/10! ~Alexfan

Author's Response: thank you for doing this! im really glad you liked the story!

i did mean get at me bro mostly cuz thts just how i always say it lol :P

HA! Was she? well Vi is a VERY interesting character as you will see later :P

thakn u so much for your review!


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