|Review:||Courtney Dark says:|
'I could really use a Draught of Peace now, she thought.' Couldn't we all? Right now my sister is blasting extremely loud music from her room, ignoring my complaints about the noise. But anyway, onto the chapter.
Normally, if a chapter was under 2000 words, I'd suggest to the author to try and make it a bit longer. But I actually like your short and sweet chapters-they make for excellent reads-they don't drag on, they don't ramble and they aren't completely irrelevant as so many stories these days are!
As always, I like the little descriptions and details you've added, especially at the start of the chapter. My favourite was the paragraph that began with: 'The stones from which the castle was built felt colder as the chill from the fast-approaching winter swirled around the grounds.' I know I've said this before, but you really have a lovely style of writing. It seems like it comes so easy for you, and I hope you never stop.
Your characterization of Snape is brilliant. He is THE Snape I remember from the books, and I love this chapter all the more for it. It really reminded me that Brienne as at Hogwarts, taking lessons etc at the same time as all the characters that we know from the books. I am getting more and more excited to find out how events play out, and what Brienne's role will be in everything. But anyway, back to Snape. I think my favourite of his lines was: '"Cooper...may I remind you that hellebore syrup is indeed a poisonous substance, and not something with which you can add liberally to something that a person will drink. This concoction that you have made is clearly unacceptable. Poor."' I can totally imagine Snape saying that!
Once again, I loved Fred and George in this chapter. Their characterization is absolutely spot on which leaves me feeling as if these are the Weasley twins. I know that probably sounded incredibly stupid, but have you ever read a fanfiction about a character from the books whose characterization is completely...off? If you have, you'll know what I'm talking about!
I also love the relationship that is developing between George and Brienne, and the fact that you are taking your time with it-which makes it seem so much more realistic. I absolutely adored this line: '"Oh," George said, obviously trying to retain the jokey banter in his voice and failing miserably, "Well, I'll talk to her. You know she won't miss sitting next to Fred."' It was just so...perfect. And this bit: 'Brienne felt the blood rush to her cheeks as the twin winked and returned to work' was very sweet also.
Author's Response: Hi! You know, these reviews just give me the biggest ego boost ever!
I know exactly what you mean about characterisation, so that's why it's so important for me to get it right. Snape is SO hard to get right, you need the right level of contempt but not go over the top xD
Fred and George are easier, but I think that's because they're my main characters so I'm more used to writing them.
I hate when in other stories the romance is just so predictable, you know exactly when and how they're going to get together. In real life that doesn't happen, ever, so I wanted to convey that :)
I will never ever stop writing, even if people are sick of me xD
Thank you again for the awesome review!