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Review:fauxthefox says:
:O This was beautiful!

I love the glimpse into Sirius' childhood. You really got across a strong idea of his loneliness, isolation, and boredom (and even some frustration with his family).

I guess I was a bit surprised that Sirius wouldn't have been more hesitant about communicating with a Muggle, especially considering the isolation of his upbringing. Maybe a break in their first "conversation" with some explanation as to why he continues it would help?

Your prose is awesome. I can't spot any typos or grammatical errors, and I love your style! A little more dialogue would make the chapter read a bit better, but I'm not sure that it would actually suit the point of the story.

The ending was awesome - I didn't see it coming and it almost made me cry! The last line was pretty awesome too.

I love this! Ahh!

Author's Response: Oooh, thank you! ♥

I'm glad that you felt that I wrote Sirius' upbringing successfully, and conveyed his emotions well.

I can understand what you're saying about Sirius' hesistance with communicating with a Muggle, but I did include a section explaining that it was his curiosity about the Muggle world that was a major part of the reason he continued talking to Lexi, especially as she contravened what his parents told him about Muggles. :)

Thank you so much! *squees* You're correct - they don't actually meet, so it would be difficult to incorporate more dialogue into this prologue.

Awww, it almost made you cry? Whoops! :P I'm glad that you liked that last line; I have to admit that I like it too!

And I'm happy that you love this! ♥

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