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Review:adluvshp says:
Hello again, here with the requested review!

I am jumping straight to your concerns here =)

The plot seems to be thickening and I liked it. The way you showed the aurors being led up to Teddy, and how things turned out, was quite good. It was fast-paced, but not too fast - I think it was suited for the plot. The way you wrote the whole thing was good. The plot seems to be well-thought and quite clear in your head, which is reflected in the writing, so thumbs up!

I wanted to see more into Victoire as a character in this chapter, but due to all the...action, it got a bit overshadowed. But from what you said in the author's note, I am assuming that we'll get to know Victoire's character better in the next chapter probably. Besides that, I liked how you showed her conflicting emotions on seeing Teddy, and later having to barge into his home to find it empty. Her confusion is also written well, and came through strongly in the narrative. She seems to be crafted in a much realistic way, so good work!

As for Teddy, he still remains a mystery (of course for the benefit of the plot) and whatever little you revealed of him was shown well I think. His character seems to be shady and you managed to get that point across smoothly.

So, your plot seems to be good. I like the characters definitely, though would prefer more development in Victoire. The air of mystery surrounding the story is well-done, and the over all grammar, pace, and flow was okay. I don't have much CC to give you. Good work, and keep writing!

Feel free to re-request!

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Thanks again! :)

I'll try to go back and develop Victoire a bit more.


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