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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hello, it's me again! I decided to come and review this chapter as well, as the last one was so good!

I have to say I love your use of words two things I picked out which were really cool were 'Victoire felt supremely uncomfortable' and 'It was a cool, crisp October morning', I don't know I just loved these phrases!

I did find it weird you said Teddy looked exactly like Victoire remembered, yet isn't he an metamorphagmus (however you spell it) so he wouldn't have a set appearance as it would change all the time.

Seeing the life and work of an auror was actually very interesting and made me want to be one too, as it was like detective work and I always thought it would be cool to be one. It seemed really realistic and believable which is good:)

Wow (I said it again!), this gets even more mysterious with Teddy's business getting caught up with the murders, and then him disappearing it's a perfect mystery! I saw you said in your A/N that there would be some of Victoire's family in the next chapter, which is good as everyone loves the Weasley's!

Overall I thought this was a really good chapter, one thing I would recommend is that though the pace is fast, maybe include some more description just so we can get a clearer idea of what's going on. Feel free to re-request as I've really enjoyed reading this! Kiana :)

Author's Response: Thanks for coming back! :) I want to work on editing the next few chapters a bit more before I re-request (I started this story a long time ago, forgot about it, and have been refurbishing before I continue).

I'll work on my descriptions! I tend to sort of forget about that stuff and focus on the characters, so thanks for pointing it out!

I guess I liked the emotional impact of having Teddy look the same in this scene, because Vic can recognize him right away. I think in other scenes when he's around people (not alone at home), I'll have him look different.

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