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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey it's patronus_charm with your review, I love Teddy/Victoire stories so of course it's my thing!

WOW! I loved that scene from the end of the book! Even though I'd only just read that, it was so sad to see Teddy die, I can't wait to see why he was going to Azkaban, and why he wanted to die instead, Victoire must love him, if she could kill him!

One point on the sub-titles, maybe if you did something less cospicuous it would be easier to read, I think it's important to have them, it's having quite a few ~'s distracts when you're reading.

I liked how the second scene tied in with the epilogue it was a really good idea. I thought it was really nice how you made Victoire a strong character, who's brave and headstrong, as she's usually a romantic, not very brave character, I think this suits her more considering who her parents are.

I thought it was interesting that you made the case a werewolf one, considering what Teddy's dad was one. I'm glad to see that there is werewolf reform as they do need it.

Wow, what a twist with Teddy and Victoire not being together and him being a werewolf. I'm starting to worry that Lorelei is right about him being involved in the murders, but I can't imagine someone like him killing people.

One another pointer, I sometimes felt the transition from scene to scene could be a bit smoother, as that would improve the flow of the story.

Overall, I really enjoyed this story, as it caused me to say wow a lot which is a really good thing. I'm so excited to see what leads up to the final scene - hopefully Teddy's not a killer! I think this a really original story and one of the best Teddy/Victoire's I've read! Kiana:D

Author's Response: Thank you so much! :) This was really helpful.

I definitely want to work on my transitions, and getting rid of the somewhat obnoxious ~s. I'll focus on keeping Victoire strong!

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