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Review:Gabriella Hunter says:
Hello!

Its Gabbie here with your requested review and nice to meet you and all that jazz. SO, this is a pretty unique little story, I really like the idea you have going for this. I'd never really thought much about the fact that Harry had saved Draco and that it would actually have consequences. And apparently, it does!
I like the Grim Reaper aspect of this, since its something I've never read before. I think Amber and her family should be given a bit more detail and that you should have slowed down a bit and set up the beginning scene more. It would have made everything much more smoother and I would have liked more details later on with their Dad/Uncle (?) and what had happened to him. From that Howler, it made it sound as if he were really sick but later on, I don't really get much on that. More description on the Potters would have been nice too, I wanted to mentally ogle your James. There's a dark twist to this story underneath Amber's attitude that I like too, you can sense that things are not going to go in a good direction and I thought she was pretty brave for wanting to marry James. It won't be easy.
What sort of relationship do they have other than a bad one? What caused it? I'd like to know a bit more about that but her horror over the situation was brilliant. The poor thing. D':
Interested in where you'll be going with this and just as another CC, you might want to shorten the spaces in your paragraphs. It'd be easier for this old lady to read but other than that and the other things that I mentioned, keep it up with your idea! I really love it and hope that you'll keep going, this has potential to be a really good story down the line.
Thanks for the read!
Much love,
Gabbie

Author's Response: Hey Gabbie! Thanks for the review =)

Draco is there father but not biologically. He is there Uncle since the kids are Daphne's children.

I was going to introduce everyone else in detail in the next chp or so but i'll do tht soon so the story makes loads more sense!

thank you im glad you liked the story =)


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