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Review:Siriusly89 says:
Hello! Siriusly89 here with your requested review :D

I am very much a next-gen kinda person, so this is most definitely my thing! :)

This is a very good foundation for what could very well be a very popular story!

I shall give you my helpful tips first, and then onto the fan-girling!

One thing I noticed is that your story is very spaced out! This happened to me many a time, and the way to avoid this is to hit 'paste as plain text' Its on the top bar next to paste from Microsoft Word when your updating your chapter! This makes things a little easier to read, and it also means I dont have to scroll very far to get to the next line (I am very lazy, as you can tell :P)

Point number two: I was slightly confused by this line: "Move move! I have to see my niece," I heard my Mum say : this confused me a little, because if it was her Mum, wouldn't she say daughter? I'm not sure, maybe its me :)

W-O-W1 A lot happening in this chapter! I am a little confused on the finer points of things, but Draco isn't the triplets dad, and the grim reaper wants to kill him and his children, but seeing as they aren't his children, why are they dying? Or is it because he thinks of them as his children? And why were Harry and James there? Did they strike this deal with the grim reaper? So many unanswered questions! Aah! Hopefully you will reveal all in later chapters to come :)

Overall a good first chappie, although I would recommend getting a beta to read over it all and fine-tune it :) Beta's really are a god send!

If you ever need any more reviews, you know where I be at :P

Author's Response: Hey ! Thanks for the review!

Oh thank you so much! Tht's really helpful =)

Right I didn't see tht when I was editing, maybe I'll look into a Beta and all :P

No see Draco is there uncle cuz the kids are Daphne's so they are related and since Draco/Astoria pretty much raised them (which will be talked about later) they are Malfoys. Potters were called since Draco owes Harry.

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