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Review:Gabriella Hunter says:
Hello!

Back again! Its Gabbie here, in case you didn't know it. *Hands out obnoxious business card* Anyway, so here we are with the meeting of Victoire and Teddy! I'm glad that he was able to do well for himself but I couldn't grasp the slight fishy feeling I got from it. A Potions company, huh? I would have wanted a tad more information on that place if I'd been Victoire and judging by what they all learned about the Family so far, I'm extremely suspicious. Bad Teddy! Not sure if he's behind this or had known anything about the murders but I can't be derailed by his amazing good looks and suave flat. Even though I sort of was. Shamefully so...
Anyhoo, Victoire! She was so anxious about seeing him and when she did there was very little reaction from Teddy, other than surprise. I couldn't help but wonder what he was thinking but it seemed like her partners didn't appreciate his indifference to them.
His mind had seemed elsewhere but he answered their questions smoothly didn't he? A little too smoothly? Hm. Suspicious!
But argh, I'm so loving the way you have the investigation though and going into detail about the people they've talked to. It feels like a really good mystery/detective sort of story and I'm not sure if that was what you were going for but I really enjoy it! Now on to the Family! Sounds awfully shady if you ask me, I hope you go into more detail about them later and argh, poor Victoire! She doesn't know what to do! Teddy's about to be brought in for questioning or arrested and she just can't handle it. But that ending, what a stunner! Loved the hint of action you're going into, it was a tad too fast, I could have used a bit more build up but it was pretty darn good! I love a cliffhanger! :D
So, thanks for the read. Your pacing was good and your characters are staying strong and there weren't any grammar mistakes! :) Have some chocolate.
Much love,
Gabbie

Author's Response: Thank you again! :) Your reviews are so lovely!!

I'll work on some buildup toward the end of the chapter, maybe some "it's quiet...too quiet" kind of stuff (haha).


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