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Review:Gabriella Hunter says:
Hello!

Its me, Gabbie with your requested review and its nice to meet you and everything. So, you've give me a Teddy/Victoire! I've only read a handful of these and nothing quite like this at all so I was pretty darn excited, especially by that opening paragraph.
I couldn't help but wonder why it was happening and what was going on for Victoire to have to kill Teddy! You built up some darn good suspense with that and the flashback didn't throw me off right away since I figured you'd want to smooth your way into that part of the story. You were able to give me a good hint of what Victoire and Teddy's relationship was like and I'm glad to see that it had developed over time and through friendship. A more passionate thing would have been all right but this felt more natural and they seemed to really care about one another.
Now, I was just getting used to the pacing you had before you jumped forward again. I don't think you needed to, really and it threw me off for a second or two as I had to get used to this new scene. So apparently, there's been murders at the Ministry and I do love a good mystery-murder thing and all your quotes of the Godfather btw. Hehehe.
You've got me really curious about the murders in general and the way the victims were mutilated. Werewolf attacks or an imposter? I would like to know these answers! And Victoire seems very capable of herself and I'm SO happy that you gave her a tough job. It counters her being so pretty and some writers have used that as a crutch, which you haven't done here. She seems to be able to stand on her own without her looks giving her the best advantage and I do actually like her.
Really interested in what happened between she and Teddy and I wished that you'd put in more detail about it but I think you're going to explain all that later. Which is just fine by me, actually. :3
There weren't any grammar problems, your characters were fresh and I think Victoire's a strong female lead so far. Aside from your abrupt time jumps, I enjoyed this! I'm going on to the next chapter now, perhaps it will be just as good as this one? :D
Much love,
Gabbie

Author's Response: Yaay, thank you!

I wanted to write something sort of out of the ordinary and I definitely didn't want Victoire to just be "the pretty girl who for some unfathomable reason is an Auror."

I guess I'll see if I can lengthen out the second scene to make it a bit less abrupt? *ponders*

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