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Review:The Misfit says:
Hi! I'm here for the review swap! :)

I have to say that I really liked your beginning - it was very unusual and really made me intrigued as to what had happened between Teddy and Victoire. In addition, the contrast between the first and second scenes was excellent - they both depicted moments of love, but the first was tinged with sadness while the second was innocent and it was so nice to see the comparison.

I would however think about explaining how Teddy and Victoire reacted to James' interruption, as it doesn't seem to be explained in the story.

Additionally, I'm intrigued at how you've made Teddy a werewolf - I don't read many next-gen fics, but this is something that to me seems unusual and stands out from similar fanfictions. The way that Victoire found out about Teddy's lycanthropy was surprising, although perfectly understandable given her assignment - I however think that she would have been a little more upset.

The time shifts made sense, and I would have been able to have read and understood the story even without your author's note. I also caught a couple of typos - in your author's note and in the scene with her Ministry's colleagues, you refer to Victoire as Dominique. o.O Also, in the scene with Victoire and Lorelei, there's a mis-spell where you put Victorie instead. (I do that too! :P)

All in all, this is a very engaging and enthralling first chapter and definitely intriguing. XD

Author's Response: Thank you! :) I'll get to your review right now!

Maybe I'll take that author's note out - I just had some anxiety that it would be impossible to read or something...

Ahhh typos! xO Must fix!

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