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Review:FredWeasleyIsMyKing says:
Hello :) Laurenzo73212 here with your slightly late requested review... apologies!

Okay, first let me say I loved this prologue! You have my interest immediately and I honestly can't wait to see where you're going to take this! What has happened? I need to know!

I thought your characterisation was great. You really captured Sirius's horrible home life well throughout. I particularly liked the bit where Sirius feels a twinge of guilt for using the same taunt on Snape as his father used on him. Funny how things come back around eh? I thought it was a really nice touch!

Lexi was a really interesting character and I thought you introduced her well. She's really suffering isn't she bless her? It can't be easy for the her mum with a man who left her to fend for 5 children but my heart went out to her with how much she felt the least loved. You wrote it beautifully.

Speaking of which, your letters were just adorable! They had this... innocent child-like quality that was just perfect. I also loved the paper/parchment comparison and how they were both confused, again just so cute!

A few other things I liked were your portrayal of Kreacher and the Muggle prejudice you included from the Blacks. Kreacher was really interesting - he came across very similar to the Kreacher in the books, he's just not quite as outspoken. He clearly answers to Sirius's mum above all. I'm also glad you included the 'Muggle's are stupid and worthless' opinion Sirius was brought up on. A lot of people were brought up on this opinion but we know Sirius manages to grow up and look past this where as many didn't. Great job!!

One small error I did notice is that you put Laura instead of Lexi (I think!) Just thought I'd point it out!

Honestly this is a great chapter and I hope you re-request when you have more up!

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Thank you for your review! Don't worry about the delay - I know how hectic RL can get! :)

I'm glad that the prologue intrigues you, and we'll find out what happened to Lexi... eventually. ;)

I'm also happy that you loved my characterization - I know that adult Sirius can't see his own flaws, but I think ten-year-old Sirius grew up brushing away his own consicience that he became blind to his negative qualities. :P Yes; I wanted to highlight how thoughtless Sirius was/is.

Thank you so much! I thought that if Lexi had been happy and close with her sisters, she wouldn't have replied to Sirius' first note and so she had to have an unhappy home life - and I don't see many fanfictions where mothers aren't the best of mothers, so I thought I'd portray that here.

Thank you! I was really worried about those letters, so it makes me insanely happy to know that they came across as childlike, since the characters are both ten.

My Kreacher is similar to JKR's Kreacher?! THANK YOU! ♥ I think the differences stem from the fact that Sirius hasn't yet been disowned from the family, so he can't be as nasty to Sirius as he'd like to for fear of punishment. And yes - he has a bad case of Walburga-worship. :P As for the Muggle prejudice, I was always curious about how Sirius became accepting of Muggles before he started Hogwarts - or he wouldn't have been in Gryffindor - and a friendship with a Muggle girl would explain that. ;)

There is an edited version of this chapter, with a chapter image, in the queue at the moment - and I've corrected the Laura in that, as other reviewers pointed that out. Thank you for pointing it out though!

Thank you - I will certainly be re-requesting!

-Katie :)


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