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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey it's patronus_charm with your review, don't worry about the lengths getting longer, that way I get to enjoy the chapter for longer ;) Thanks for saying my reviews were wonderful it really meant a lot to me :D Ok on with la review!

Though I may have already said, I think it was really good how you developed Helga and Salazar's friendship slowly, as I do believe making them friends first does make their relationship more realistic and believable. As you tend to have so much free will in the Founders era, it was good that you didn't use it excessively, but kept within the realms of normal :D, unlike some people.

At times, I felt the wording was a little awkward, and had to reread the sentence so I could get the full meaning, so may be if you reviewed that it would improve the flow of things. I thought your vocabulary though was very befitting of the era which was great that you tried to make it historically correct as possible.

I thought it was great that even though Helga is an awesome character she still underestimates herself. I feel this is such a Hufflepuff quality it really fitted in with the story. When she underestimates herself it seems to only be her physical attributes that she's underestimating, because she's seemed to have grown in confidence, and can now make jokes with Salazar.

Even though Helga is my favourite character in this story, Rowena is a close second, as she's rather funny, in a quirky way. The way she's so determined to find a spell which will get rid of the boggart reminded me a lot of Hermione, and when she was researching basilisk's/horcruxes/e.t.c.

I thought the scene in which Rowena revealed that she knew about Helga's true heritage, was great, as you could really sense the tension between the two, and Rowena's anger/annoyance/sorrow to Helga's sorrow at having to betray her friend and still betray another.

Overall I thought it was a great chapter, I can't wait for the moment something more happens between Helga and Salazar. I think this a really underrated genre, but hopefully stories like yours will help change its reputation. Kiana!

Author's Response: Hey again! Thanks for the awesome review, as always :)

Helga and Salazar are so much fun to write together, and I'm glad you like the fact that they start as friends. I'm like you--I found that to be the most realistic way to go, especially for two people who are so different. And I'll definitely look over my wording later, but I'm happy you're enjoying the vocabulary itself.

I'm so happy you're still liking Helga! I wanted her to connect with people and to be relatable even though she's from a different time. She doees have some areas where she lacks confidence, and don't we all? But I wanted her relationship with Salazar to help her confidence, and I'm glad you're seeing that even at this early stage.

Aww, I like Rowena too! I'm glad you see humor in her, since it's not really an obvious trait of hers. She's definitely a little off-center compared to most women of her time, because she values learning so much (as we already knew.) She's been great fun to write. She is a great person to come to for guidance or advice, as Helga is learning. I'm glad you liked the scene between them. Helga's got an intense moral decisions to make, and I thought it was important to show that not everyone will always approve of her actions.

Thanks again for the great review! I'm off to respond to your next one now :)

--Maggie


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