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Review:Calypso says:
So I wrote this review for review tag, but then someone posted before me- I figured I'd post it for you anyway! :P

I really enjoyed getting to know Thalia a bit more in this chapter. Her chatty, slightly sarcastic narrative style is so easy to read, and makes her sound very human.

Another thing I think you do really well is writing the conversations between friends. I liked Lily's joke about putting Thalia in detention and Thalia teasing Maia about liking Remus. It all felt very natural. Thalia's descriptions of her friends were very sweet too.
Thalia's description of Sirius and James was also great- I could just picture the pair of them on the platform being all overenthusiastic and crashing into each other :P

The big thing I would mention is your punctuation- there were places where I thought it could have been better, and sort of disrupted the flow of what you were writing.

So far, it's not the most original plot I've ever read but I'm enjoying it all the same! I'm certainly intrigued as to how Thalia and Sirius are going to get together! I like that you've introduced some other plot strands, such as the Lily/James thing and Maia's feelings for Remus. I'm sure that (as Thalia says) it's going to be an interesting year!

-Bethany

Author's Response: Aw, thanks for reviewing me anyway! I'm glad that Thalia's easy to read, as I wanted to make her sound human, and not too superior or inferior of her views of herself. Just hopefully someone you could maybe relate to:) Yeah the punctuation is the one which always get me, I will review it sometime I just don't seem to have any spare time at the moment! Yeah I do feel the beginning is a bit unoriginal, but hopefully that will change as the story progresses.

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