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Review:Elphaba and Boyfriends says:
Hi, Elphaba back again. :)

While I wish that this chapter had a little more dialog to break up the descriptive paragraphs, there are a lot of great observations here. For instance, I like this one a lot: "Even though they were complete strangers, something about being in this room full of people made Charlie feel more at ease... probably the fact that he was used to being in a room full of chattering people when he was with his family." I think there's a lot of truth in that sentence.

I like the dialog between Charlie and Liz near the end, especially how they both stumble over their names as they introduce themselves. I wonder about Liz's back story: why did her mother move from Britain to Tennessee? How did she then decide to move to Rhode Island? I assume there's some secret there that will be revealed later on. ;)

Author's Response: Hello again, dear! I'm sorry it's taken so long for me to respond to these AMAZING reviews! School has just kind of taken over my life! :/

Your suggestion about the dialog is duly noted! But I'm glad that there were some good observations there to throw off some of the lack of dialog!

Hm... As for Liz's back story, we'll find out more about that in later chapters. *Whistles* You'll just have to keep reading to find out... XD

Thank you SO much for the review and the feedback, dear!!


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