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Review:patronus_charm says:
Hey it's patronus_charm from the review battle in the Ravenclaw Common Room!

I thought your description was great and it really helped captivate the mood and scene before you. The way you could really feel Hermione's hurt over Ron was great, I think one of the best lines was when you saying she could admire the grounds of Hogwarts in the illuminated nearly full moon. I thought it was so mysterious and beautiful!

I thought the way Ron was acting was realistic, which is really good, because when Hermione isn't paired with him, people tend to make him out as a bad guy. But I guess he only really started seeing other girls after they spilt up so it was ok!

You portrayed Hermione and Ginny's friendship really well, and you could tell how good friends they were from the way Ginny cared for Hemione. I wasn't too sure about Ginny saying 'not so hard, your squashing my vital assets.' as I felt it was a little out of character.

Other than that I thought it was a really good, as the reader now wants to read on and find out more details about Ron and Hermione's split up! Kiana :)

Author's Response: Thank you for such a lovely review *gush* I didn't want Ron to be betrayed as a bad guy, they had just moved on from each other. It happens in times like this when everything changes so dramatically. I'm so happy you enjoyed the first chapter.

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